it is very hard for me to read poems that I think need repairs.  Today there was a poem that appeared on poem-a-day.  I couldn’t read it without tinkering.

Yone Noguchi

The faint shadow of the morning moon?
Nay, the snow falling on the earth.
The mist of blossoming flowers?
Nay, poetry smiling up the sky.

 

so I love it, but I’d rather have it 

Yone Noguchi

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The faint shadow of the morning moon –
No, the snow falling on the ground.
The mist of blossoming flowers –
No, poems smile up to the sky.

 

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